Angel of Death

This was really good. You captured the emotion of a battered woman very well and the MC was believable as well. I hope Mischa gets a happy ending. Keep writing!!

Finally a second chapter! I love the name Ambrose, its Greek right? Well anyways you've made this so original and I loved it, please keep writing!!

I see nothing wrong with this as always. I love how you capture the readers minds with real feelings somebody might have in this situation. You are a very great ...

I agree with writing for love, please please please write more!! I really want to know what happens next. You are an amazing emotion builder, you make the MC seem ...

This was really good, you have a great storyline. I'm off to the next chapter.

This was really good, you should post more. But there was some problems... The vampire heard me, When the MC asks "What are you?" it seems a little dumb to ...

The best thing to do is to keep a notebook with your ideas in there because when you're using a computer you never know whats going to happen. Also a ...

I think thats a very crazy statement. There is no such thing as a first novel. The piece of art you're working on grows and grows and once you publish ...

I loved this ending BBB, wow you are an amazing writer. I really enjoyed how you tied everything in and the last sentence I really loved it. Crap. I think ...

I think you have a great start here except I have read Twilight and there are a few similarities. Maybe if you add a little bit more to this, everyone ...

This was Wow!! You did a great job with the emotions of the MC, you're an awesome writer. This deserves a star!!!

Thanks Jab, you helped me out a lot.

This is very sad but I think you are very brave, a lot of girls go through the same thing would keep it a secret until it was too late...this ...

Okay the truth is I skimmed through this *sorry* but I like what I see so far. So Sophie comes from a family of vampire hunters, eh? And I'm guessing ...

OMG!! This was so sad, but I want to know what happened next, please say that that creep got put in jail for the rest of his life. Oh...this... Sorry ...